One of the things that I often find interesting about free verse, especially on this website, is that it lacks a general spirit of maturity and experience and relies primarily on the emotional appeal to the reader. And while the emotional appeal is always important, the depth of maturity that is shown here is far beyond your average free verse work.
I also appreciated how the reoccurring metaphors had crystal clarity continuously throughout the work. They really held together a piece of work with an integrity that an emotional splat would have lacked. So conventionally, there is nothing I can detect to fix. (if you do edit your poetry, that is. If not, feel free to ignore me. Well, in general, feel free to ignore me.)
The only place that lacked clarity was the line "And yet I am falling into the vines sweeping the fabric..." You continue into another thought after that without returning to the previous idea. So when left to comprehension, I am left to my own devices as a reader to try to figure out what you meant. And to a certain extent, that is the nature of scansion. But in this case I think you could improve the power of the line if you made the words a little clearer as to what you meant, or if you separated the two statements like so: "And yet I am falling into the vines, sweeping the fabric..." That is obviously the easiest route. However, if you took that route I would still be confused as to why you were talking about vines with couches and fabric. There isn't a clear metaphorical meaning unless a word describing the vines or your relation to the vines is introduced, ie. entangle.
The nit-picking grammarian in me also wants to look at the use of italics. Yes, most people understand them to be used for emphasis in common and poetic writing. And yes, I realize that this is a piece of free verse poetry and not a term paper. That being said, I think that there could be a better way to say it. Since this is not Concrete Poetry and you aren't using formatting to convey the point of your verses any more than the usual line breaks, periods, and commas, the italics stick out in an icky way. I think substituting a synonym would work better (like final), or just putting a comma or ellipses between them as opposed to the italics. If the point is to emphasize the finality of the kiss, and this is free verse, why not just put four or five spaces between the words, or a line break? Anyway, you don't have to listen to the nit-picking grammarian, but I think that could be a place to improve the stopping power of that particular line.
Now the complaining is over.
Overall, this is one of the better pieces of poetry I have read of late. I was getting nostalgic for my poetically formative days and the ages of whispering Jack Kerouac to my wall. It seemed that you almost used the environment as a character. And I felt a sort of beautiful antagonism between the seasons and you. That was an excellent metaphor to display powerlessness because who of us can change the season or the weather? The theme of love is older than recorded history, but the way you displayed it in an adult and almost world weary way was captivating and horrifying. It was very easy to wear the shoes of the voice of the poem, and that was a properly emotionally distressing experience. So all in all, this was very impactful and very skillfully executed. I wish I was this good with middle of the night poetry.